Very interesting. Their voices are dead-on, and I could see it happening exactly this way. I liked how you described John's thoughts about his marriage, that it really meant something to him.
And John had been hearing this speech for almost three days, so he felt free to go on to the Q&A section and let the details wash over him: kind, generous, insightful, yadda yadda yadda. Katie walks on water, Katie is made of shimmering, pure celestial radiance, life without Katie is a sucking void of existential loneliness and pain. At first he really had felt bad for Rodney; by now he was starting to suspect Rodney was just fine-tuning his memoirs. - HA! That was *awesome*, totally made me laugh out loud and read it to my SO. :)
“Why do you care?” John said, a sudden hammer-strike of anger hitting him in the chest and cracking something, like an ice floe breaking off the shelf. He used to fly over the ice and admire it – how complex it was, how full of contradictions under its stark, uniform surface. Antarctica contained seventy percent of the world’s fresh water, frozen into Earth’s largest desert. What could you do with something like that except admire it? - The imagery here is beautiful, and absolutely perfect for describing that sort of emotion.
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And John had been hearing this speech for almost three days, so he felt free to go on to the Q&A section and let the details wash over him: kind, generous, insightful, yadda yadda yadda. Katie walks on water, Katie is made of shimmering, pure celestial radiance, life without Katie is a sucking void of existential loneliness and pain. At first he really had felt bad for Rodney; by now he was starting to suspect Rodney was just fine-tuning his memoirs. - HA! That was *awesome*, totally made me laugh out loud and read it to my SO. :)
“Why do you care?” John said, a sudden hammer-strike of anger hitting him in the chest and cracking something, like an ice floe breaking off the shelf. He used to fly over the ice and admire it – how complex it was, how full of contradictions under its stark, uniform surface. Antarctica contained seventy percent of the world’s fresh water, frozen into Earth’s largest desert. What could you do with something like that except admire it? - The imagery here is beautiful, and absolutely perfect for describing that sort of emotion.