This story? Is very very good. And how much do I love the little Canadian references? A lot. This line makes me laugh cause that sentence or some semblance thereof repeats often in my little corner of Ontario.

"..That two-four and those girls on the beach?"

*shakes head sadly because more often than not, I was one of those girls on the beach*

Anyway...nice premise, great story. Off to read part 2!