I was wondering if anybody'd be willing to beta a short piece for me for this challenge- it's currently about 600 words. Spelling and grammar are okay, I need some help with tightening the POV voice before I can continue the plot. The POV character is Lorne, it's gen, and there's a couple vague references to an unspecified recent incident involving Simpson but I don't think they're triggery.

Anybody, please?