i love the scene on the balcony at the end. delightful to see them being themselves, not over the top, just themselves. it makes the depth of their connection feel even more powerfully gentle. and the combination of that, along with the snark is beautifully balanced.
this: "John looked affronted. "Well, it's been a tough couple of months. You're thinning a little, yourself." He reached up toward his own head with one blood-sticky hand, looked at it and lowered it again."
this feels vital somehow, because even in the midst of the humor, and horniness, they are still in this outrageous situation 24/7, and you've layered that in perfectly. *smooch*
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i love the scene on the balcony at the end. delightful to see them being themselves, not over the top, just themselves. it makes the depth of their connection feel even more powerfully gentle. and the combination of that, along with the snark is beautifully balanced.
this: "John looked affronted. "Well, it's been a tough couple of months. You're thinning a little, yourself." He reached up toward his own head with one blood-sticky hand, looked at it and lowered it again."
this feels vital somehow, because even in the midst of the humor, and horniness, they are still in this outrageous situation 24/7, and you've layered that in perfectly. *smooch*