Ronon snapped one of the umbrellas open and held it over Teyla. McKay snapped the other umbrella open and held it over himself, and John elbowed him until he shifted over a bit.

*dies laughing* So perfect. I love your characterization.

the bit where loose threads from the mission plot are tied up in a half-assed sort of way

This perfectly describes the ending to every plotty story I have ever written. *hides*

I really love the structure, it's great fun, and you wrote a wonderful story around it.