I spit out and M&M while reading this. It fell on the floor and the dog ate it (the M&M, not the story). This is wonderfully done. Humor is really hard; it's very easy to oversell a joke or smack the reader upside the head with the equvalent of *elbow poke* - do ya get it?, and you avoided that deftly here. The scenario was a breath of fresh air in a fandom of Perfect First-time Sex with Rainbows and Mutual Smultaneous Orgasms *shower of glitter*.

But it was definitely John who got come in Rodney's eye. is where I spit out the M&M. They're both such loveable dorks and you really captured that in the way the cannot get their shit together but they keep on trying because they both really want to have sex, even if it's not Perfect First-time Sex with Rainbows and Mutual Smultaneous Orgasms *shower of glitter* They want to be together, and that makes this sweet as well as funny.