ext_1772 ([identity profile] frostfire-17.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] sga_flashfic2005-04-14 03:32 am

Silva, by Frostfire

Title: Silva
Author: Frostfire
Rating: R
Spoilers: Vaguely for 38 Minutes
Summary: The forest's moving
Notes: Written between the hours of 1:30 and 3:30 in the morning, which should be warning enough for anyone. Also, "Silva" is Latin for "forest".

The sun’s setting.

Rodney tells his subconscious to shut up and go away. He’s already lying on the forest floor with a very sharp and possibly murderous vine wrapped around his body. Whether he does it in broad daylight or the middle of the night really isn’t going to make any difference. Unless there are other dangerous alien life-forms on this planet that a) are nocturnal, and b) can deal with these freaking plants.

Around him, the forest shifts.

“Plants shouldn’t move like that,” he says to John. His voice isn’t very loud, compared to the constant slide of miles of carnivorous plant matter. Of course, he’s louder than John, who hit his head on the way down and is too busy being unconscious to say anything; Rodney’s given up trying to yell him awake. He has been keeping an eye on John’s chest. It isn’t moving very fast, but it’s moving, and really, Rodney thinks he’s hyperventilating enough to compensate.

He looks at the vine. “You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism, if the Major’s bug doesn’t get here first.”

The vine rustles at him. His own voice is doing absolutely nothing to restore his calm. Let alone distract him from the fact that he’s definitely weaker than he was fifteen minutes ago.

He does math in his head. Plays a mental game of prime/not-prime, trying to distract himself from the way his arms are pinned to his body and his legs are pressed tight together and he’s lying flat on his back with no way to move before he dies. The vine twitches, which hurts. Rodney plays more prime/not-prime solitaire. Does more math. Counts the little points of pain where thorns are digging into his skin—stop.

Too late, and he now knows there are sixteen little sharp vine pieces burrowing underneath his skin. His brain ignores all the unknown variables and tries to make that number into some sort of information about how much time he has left. Assuming the vine’s weakening effects engage in a numerical progression related to the number of thorns in the body, it’s half the time he’d have left if there were eight, the square root of if there were four, the cube root of—he needs to stop. He’s going to die eventually, and it doesn’t matter what the number of minutes is the cube root of.

He’s not panicking. He’s not panicking. He’s not panicking.

He’s dizzy.

And the forest won’t shut up. The vines rustle. The trees creak. It’s getting dark, and he’s lying on his back on an alien planet with a vine sucking the life out of him and Ford and Teyla are probably in exactly the same position somewhere else in the forest, and Sheppard’s unconscious damn him to hell.

Prime numbers. 1433. 779351. 3221. 30869.  26972593-1.

Doesn’t work. He’s hyperventilating, and now he doesn’t know if he’s light-headed because of that or because of the evil alien plant. Or, well, hungry alien plant, anyway, because he doesn’t know if it’s sentient and really, can something that isn’t sentient be evil?

He…can’t work his brain well enough to think of an answer to that.

Numbers are maybe safer.

Being dizzy while lying down is such a wrong feeling, somehow. He takes a few deep breaths and doesn’t try to move, because he’s discovered that every time he does, the vine tightens and then he starts to panic.

He closes his eyes and he can feel the forest moving around him, in addition to the swaying that his inner ear is conjuring up, and maybe he’ll pass out now—

Sheppard groans.

“Major? Major!” He’s awake now, except he’s weak and sweating profusely, but he really doesn’t care, if John’s waking up.

But there’s no further noise from his left, just the slight whisper of breathing, which the forest mostly drowns out anyway. If he turns his head, he can make out John’s shape about six inches away, almost touching, close enough to touch if his hands weren’t pinned to his sides by this goddamned plant

Breathe.

He wants, suddenly, desperately, to reach out and touch John. Just a little, just enough to know that there’s another warm living person here with him, even if he can’t talk or move, even if he’s a military idiot who pretends he isn’t as smart as Rodney knows he is, and can’t keep himself conscious to save his life, and whose fault it probably is that they’re here, considering his phenomenally bad luck with regards to life-sucking aliens of whatever form.

He’s having a hard time telling, now, whether it’s the forest or his vision that’s shifting around, whether it’s the forest or his hearing that’s ringing in his ears, but he can still feel the sixteen bright points of pain and the line of warmth that’s John, next to him.

He’s never going to forgive the guy for being unconscious during their last moments. They could have…said things. Last words. Although most of what Rodney would want to say would be wasted on someone who was also about to die. But John’s different, and—he can’t concentrate hard enough to finish that thought, but he knows it’s important. That’ll have to be enough. He tries for prime numbers again and can’t get any, which seems to be a very bad sign.

He’s getting cold. He can’t tell if his eyes are open or closed. He knows he can hear the forest.

 

When he wakes up, he panics.

“Rodney! Rodney, calm down!” penetrates just as he realizes that he can, actually, move his arms. And then he recognizes the accent.

Carson.” And yeah, there he is, bending down, looking concerned. Bending down over Rodney’s bed. His hospital bed. His hospital bed which is located in the city of Atlantis and not in a forest full of life-sucking plants.

He turns his head to one side and there’s Teyla and Ford, hovering just behind Carson. He turns it to the other side and—oh thank God—there’s John, in the next bed. He only just manages to keep himself from reaching out.

 

Ford tells the we-rescued-you-in-the-nick-of-time story, which involves P-90’s, a quick trip through the Stargate, and then laser cutting tools and life signs detectors. In the middle, Elizabeth shows up, and shortly after that, John wakes up, and it’s all a big happy party. Or something. Carson makes noises about a poison the vine released into their system that weakened and partially paralyzed them; they were apparently going to be eaten over a period of days.

Rodney’s bed is very, very narrow.

Ford’s just finished giving John the parts of the story that he missed when Rodney finally cracks. “Look,” he says, “I hate to be rude—”

“No, you don’t,” Ford grins.

He doesn’t snap at him. “Fine. I love to be rude. I’m tired. It is time for all of you to leave.” So he can have a traumatic flashback in private. Please. “My brain will be once again available to safeguard the people of Atlantis tomorrow.”

Everybody makes their version of a well-wishing and they all trickle out, and Rodney’s left with John and Carson. And the bed, which is still. very. narrow. He rests his hands on his solar plexus. “Carson?”

“Hm?” He’s fiddling with something.

“Did I hear you say that the plant’s toxin is basically gone from our systems?”

“That’s right.”

“Then is there any real reason you need us here overnight? Can’t we sleep in our rooms?”

Carson frowns. “Well, the likelihood of you suffering a relapse or a reaction, this long after you were exposed, is vanishingly small. I was going to keep you for observation, but if you really want to go, it shouldn’t be a problem.”

John’s watching him from the other bed, silent. “We’ll check in tomorrow morning,” Rodney promises.

“So you’re speaking for yourself and Major Sheppard, then?”

“Yeah, I’d like to go, too,” John says, still watching Rodney. “I feel fine.” And he sits up, then stands, slowly but without swaying.

“All right, then. Off you both go, and come back tomorrow, mind.”

Standing is a bit of an effort, but his legs remember how the walking thing goes—despite being wrapped with vine for hours, pressed together and unable to move—and he follows Sheppard into the hall. They walk together, and Rodney doesn’t touch John.

He can still feel the line of pressure snaking around his body, stopping at sixteen painful little points.

Inside John’s room, Rodney latches onto him and clings. There’s a second where John tenses, and Rodney wonders if he’s going to have to lie awake all night after all, but then he’s wrapping himself around Rodney and pulling him across the room. They stumble and fall onto the bed, Rodney’s face pushed into John’s neck and John’s leg curled around his.

“Rustling,” says John, breath moving over Rodney’s hair. “I can still hear it. It was all around.”

Rodney shudders and covers John’s mouth. “Don’t talk about it. Please. Not now.”

John nods under his hand, and Rodney lifts it up and kisses him.

John’s mouth is hot and his tongue is good and his hands are sliding over Rodney’s body and stripping him naked, which is just, oh God, and Rodney goes to work on John’s clothes—and then they’re naked, rubbing against each other while Rodney licks his way back into John’s mouth. And it’s hot, and good, and they’re moving but their surroundings are staying totally still, which is just, Rodney can’t even express how right that is, how much of a relief. The light’s low and John’s skin is about as far from green as colors get, glowing golden and damp with sweat, and this is definitely, completely not a cold dark forest floor.

He can move his hands. He can put them on John’s skin, run them up and down and watch his chest jerk with a gasp, slip fingers into John’s mouth while he twists his hips, wrap his arms around John’s back when they roll over.

And finally, finally, when he comes, he can’t hear the rustling anymore.

end

[identity profile] akire-yta.livejournal.com 2005-04-14 10:59 pm (UTC)(link)
I read it, then looked at the author's tag

"Fuck me sideways," I said. "It's HER again!!!"

*gg*

[identity profile] farwing.livejournal.com 2005-04-15 01:16 am (UTC)(link)
Er...you may have a point there.
ext_1637: (bleeder rodney by chelle)

[identity profile] wickedwords.livejournal.com 2005-04-15 02:32 am (UTC)(link)
I loved the horror of this, and how Rodney's mind was racing as he was trapped. The constand re-framing and repetition was very effective.
tinny: Something Else holding up its colorful drawing - "be different" (sga_sheppard trouble by wikidwitch)

[personal profile] tinny 2005-04-15 05:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Mwwaaaah! Great we-survived sex. Mmmmhhh.
How on earth did you write this marvelous piece in the middle of the night? :)

typo first: a military idiot who pretends his isn’t as smart as Rodney knows he is
(please tell me if I should stop pointing out typos)

Rodney's math wiz distractions were great! I could listen to him ramble all day long.

I'm getting the feeling that your understanding of Rodney and John is very similar to my own. Rodney believes John to be much more intelligent than he lets on. I'm all with you.

He’s awake now, except he’s weak and sweating profusely, but he really doesn’t care if John’s waking up.

That is a bit ambiguous - or it might be my grasp of English? I first thought he didn't care *that* John's waking up.

Seems like the majority of people has written deadly aliens. I love those fics that take you to the point right before death. Here it was so sad and not enough time, never enough time... . No more prime numbers. *sniff*


[identity profile] kimera.livejournal.com 2005-04-16 05:19 am (UTC)(link)
Mostly because I suck at thinking them up...

Oh, I hear that! Most of the time I end up either doing the translating-trick, or the one where I look through all my mp3s till I find a good song title and use that ;)
tinny: Something Else holding up its colorful drawing - "be different" (sga_sheppard trouble by wikidwitch)

[personal profile] tinny 2005-04-16 05:42 am (UTC)(link)
Maybe you should beta for me. Wait, you offered to...didn't you?

Wee, yes, I did! And I'd love to. Since I don't write myself, and also am not a native speaker, you might want to use more than just me. I don't know too much about writing theory, but I know I'm good at finding all the typo/grammar stuff.

Oh, and I have very little time. So ideally, I will need a weekend to really do it right. But if the story length is like this, flashfic style, I don't see a problem doing it overnight (I'm on Central European Time).

Really, I'd be honored! If you ever feel the need for a beta, just write to my lj mail address, and I'll do my best!

As for the middle-of-the-night thing, well, I think my stodgy inner critic's bedtime is like 9:00. Most of my coolest stuff is done at night.

Hee. ;) I wish I could do that! Myself, I go to sleep like a bird when you put a cloth over its cage. As soon as the light's gone, I keel over (almost literally). It's a rare occurrence that I stay up later than 11. I did, twice, this week, and now I'm a total wreck. *yawn*

I have a mild inferiority complex about my sex-writing skills, in addition to a mild embarrassment when doing it, especially if I name body parts...

I *know* what you mean! I think that part actually gets easier when you're not a native speaker. The words don't have a lot of their social stigmata that every English native speaker picks up from experience. When I talk about sex in German, I hardly ever get any words out. And if I do, they're always the same ones - there are hardly any that sound good and that I feel comfortable using. But I have the feeling it gets easier with time.
tinny: Something Else holding up its colorful drawing - "be different" (ent_archer duh)

[personal profile] tinny 2005-04-16 05:49 am (UTC)(link)
you might want to use more than just me

And now that sounds as if I think you badly need a beta. Not what I meant at all. ;/
You are excellent.
tinny: Veronica Mars, wondering 'what's wrong with me?' (veronica_mars whats wrong with me)

[personal profile] tinny 2005-04-16 06:27 am (UTC)(link)
(maaaaybe carpal tunnel. maaaaybe just overstrained wrists. bleah.)
Ugh! I have that as well. For the last two years in my left wrist (don't ask me why left - I'm right handed) - now the left one's getting better and the right one starts acting up. Keep wearing those braces, they're essential. Without those, I could not have continued in my job, typing hurt so much.

I want comments like the feedback-whore I am
Not blaming you for that one! Hey, and it doesn't matter. You'll have to put up with me pointing out typos in my comments instead. ;)

Oh, can you open MS Word documents?
Yes, I can. I'm not usually a MS fan, but Word is best for betaing since you can add notes and colors and stuff, and they don't interfere with the actual text.

[identity profile] ship-recs.livejournal.com 2005-04-16 12:32 pm (UTC)(link)
That was lovely. I love this:

“You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism"

[identity profile] coreopsis.livejournal.com 2005-04-17 10:09 pm (UTC)(link)
This was awesome. The forest bits were very nicely creepy and yet this:"You know, if you’re sucking the life out of me, I have to tell you, you get no points for originality. In fact, the Wraith may have to come along and sue you for plagiarism, if the Major’s bug doesn’t get here first." made me laugh out loud. That sounds so Rodney. heh.

And then the ending was very hot. Yes. *g*

[identity profile] mamoru22.livejournal.com 2005-04-19 10:18 pm (UTC)(link)
that was really really nice and absolutely in character especially McKay.

It makes me so happy that they got away*g*

[identity profile] kalimyre.livejournal.com 2005-04-21 04:45 pm (UTC)(link)
Mmmmm, scary-good. I love me a shot of classic whumping, and McKay's reaction was just right, claustrophobic and panicky without being over the top. Lovely ending, too. John and Rodney hotness, yay. :-)

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