Thank you! That's a great description of the flow of the poem, and it's what I'd hoped it would accomplish, so hooray. For all that I love that scene in the episode, I wish there'd been more frustrated, helpless worry on Rodney's face to balance out the humor and his excitement (poor McKay, always the butt of the joke -- unless Ford's around), and that's what I tried to touch on in this.

Also, hee -- glad the poets.org link was helpful.