ext_16021 ([identity profile] akire-yta.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] sga_flashfic2005-04-22 09:34 am

Darkness Challenge - Human Eyes, by akire

Title: Human Eyes
Author: akire
Rating: G
Notes: Drabblefic, ten minutes from idea to posting, so all mistakes are mine



When he sat in the chair, colour returned. He saw through the city, her sensors and scanners showing him things he thought he’d never see. He could see in ultraviolet, infrared and a thousand other spectrums. He could see deep into space, or down to the genetic level of the people walking the corridors beyond his lonely tower.

But eventually the chair would retract, and kindly hands would guide him back to his lonely quarters. And he would be left alone in the dark to remember that last bright flash of light and mourn the loss of his human eyes.

[identity profile] sivib.livejournal.com 2005-04-22 03:44 am (UTC)(link)
Ohhh...this just begs to be a longer fic. Nicely succinct, but the underlying story sounds intense. Shep (or Beckett, I suppose), living life through the chair, withdrawing into himself. Why is he left alone in the dark? Not on Atlantis, now, but somewhere else with a chair, among people he doesn't know? And when he's rescued? Oh.... You give good drabble.

[identity profile] frostfire-17.livejournal.com 2005-04-22 07:35 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, wow. Ouch, ouch, ouch. That's...quick and sharp. And goooood.

[identity profile] kimaken.livejournal.com 2005-04-22 11:02 am (UTC)(link)
Cool drabble--intense and sad. Must be Shep (looking at your avatar)!
Hope you write this into a longer fic to fill in the details.

[identity profile] maisierita.livejournal.com 2005-04-22 01:06 pm (UTC)(link)
OUCH!

[identity profile] barkeep.livejournal.com 2005-04-22 06:18 pm (UTC)(link)
Nicely done.
Sad but lovely.
ext_975: photo of a woof (Sorry)

Oww!

[identity profile] springwoof.livejournal.com 2005-04-24 03:31 am (UTC)(link)
Hurty goodness! Very sharp and painful...

sad tail droop,

springwoof