I loved this! I really liked how the tone gradually shifted. It was almost like you got the reader a bit drunk and got their guard down, and then wham. *g* I have a great appreciation for your ability to do that.
I got such a kick out of Rodney being all smug in the beginning over having listened closely enough to remember what Katie had told him about the scent. Rodney's crack about hoping Teyla wasn't proposing, and John's story about the guy who had to have the tattoo removed cracked me up.
And the way you ended it with Rodney dreaming was perfect, both in it being a reflection on the fears of the Wraith that must constantly haunt all of them, and in that after you hear a horror story, nightmares are a pretty common reaction. Excellent challenge answer.
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Date: 2005-12-14 05:17 pm (UTC)I got such a kick out of Rodney being all smug in the beginning over having listened closely enough to remember what Katie had told him about the scent. Rodney's crack about hoping Teyla wasn't proposing, and John's story about the guy who had to have the tattoo removed cracked me up.
And the way you ended it with Rodney dreaming was perfect, both in it being a reflection on the fears of the Wraith that must constantly haunt all of them, and in that after you hear a horror story, nightmares are a pretty common reaction. Excellent challenge answer.