This was incredible! Seriously, so far this is my favorite story I've read this year in SGA (which perhaps says something both about my tastes and your writing!)
I am a big fan of structure, and I like both your choice in how to structure it overall, and the choice of order for the events of each section. Ending the "Runner" years on the planet the SGA team found him on was perfect, for example. The paired vignettes do a wonderful job of showcasing Ronon's depth and the aspects of his character which lurk under the surface. And yet even though it's a Ronon piece, the other characters are present and used with great sensitivity - I loved the phone call from Rodney that was so hilariously instantly Rodney, for example - a deft characterization done with few words.
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Date: 2006-03-25 02:44 pm (UTC)I am a big fan of structure, and I like both your choice in how to structure it overall, and the choice of order for the events of each section. Ending the "Runner" years on the planet the SGA team found him on was perfect, for example. The paired vignettes do a wonderful job of showcasing Ronon's depth and the aspects of his character which lurk under the surface. And yet even though it's a Ronon piece, the other characters are present and used with great sensitivity - I loved the phone call from Rodney that was so hilariously instantly Rodney, for example - a deft characterization done with few words.