Yes! Thank you so much. I love that someone actually got this. I knew I'd messed it up a bit, but it's good to know that it didn't totally fail.
Thanks for the feedback on the pace and the punctuation. I plan to rework it before posting to my lj account. With luck I'll be able to fix the most egregious problems.
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Date: 2006-08-18 01:43 pm (UTC)Thanks for the feedback on the pace and the punctuation. I plan to rework it before posting to my lj account. With luck I'll be able to fix the most egregious problems.