I understand the vagueness, and I like it very much, but if I may make a suggestion? I think it would be easier to read if you could think of words to put in the blanks (like "his companion," or "his visitor"), and replace "his/her" with "their" or something. It may be a bit repetative, and not grammatically correct, but I think it would flow better.
That said, I LIKE that you kept this open, and it is NOT an easy thing to do. Much fun to build yer own ship. ^_^
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Date: 2006-12-06 05:57 pm (UTC)That said, I LIKE that you kept this open, and it is NOT an easy thing to do. Much fun to build yer own ship. ^_^