cachexia, by sin [blood challenge]

[sinden.livejournal.com]

cachexia
Sheppard/McKay

many thanks to coreopsis, nemoinis and ink_stain for hand holding while I tried something different. :)


cachexia

Each look, a warning
-- DEFCON 3 and falling, as his eyes are drawn back again and again. Magnetic north, when all he's had are southern climes.

Each word, a hammer
-- a battering ram wrapped in sarcasm, blundering like a bull in a china shop, but breaking down walls with no by your leave, no manners, in a way that borders on sly.

Each touch, like frostbite
-- cool at first, then a slow spreading warmth that enervates him, lulls him with dreams that turn painful. Human flesh, awash with returning sensation, screams.

Each kiss, a razorblade
-- scalpel-sharp, slicing clean and delicate through his layers. The bite only comes after the lingering taste of each swipe of Rodney's tongue, after each press of Rodney's lips, fades.

He wishes there was blood -- a red stain on snow, flagged bright and vivid, a wound -- something, anything, to show the truth, to show how he's been cracked open and gutted out.

Something tangible.

Something other than the soft look in Rodney's eyes when John raises shaking fingers to touch his face.

Comments

[alasen.livejournal.com]

Hmm, that was interesting, and also good.


(and made me go to a dictionary)

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Thanks. There was just a weird thought link in my brain about what would happen if cachexia was something more than physical. What if it was something more emotional/spiritual? Ta da, rather cracked out and weird, but I rather like it.

[tinny]

OMG, how cool. Poor anchorless Sheppard.

Magnetic north, when all he's had are southern climes.

Sooo many meanings to this!

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I wanted to try something a little different, so I'm glad you liked. :)

[lemonbella.livejournal.com]

This is beautiful, the imagery is just superb.

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly. I knew it was going to be a little cracked from the start, but it's so nice being able to play with something different. Glad you liked. :)

[cynnamon37.livejournal.com]

This was just superb. Wonderful imagery.

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked. It's always nice to try something different every once in a while. :)

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

[stricken]

I love it when it means so much.

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Thank you kindly. I just had the idea of what if Sheppard was emotionally isolated as well as physically by the time he gets to McMurdo. It would hurt learning to feel again. And McKay would be the only one that could get through.

[http://users.livejournal.com/_bettina_/]

Ohhh, very interesting and great! I like it a lot :-).

[sinden.livejournal.com]

Thanks, petal. It's a little cracked, but I think that's why I liked it. *g*