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So the story that eventually became The Jenny Code had a vastly different origin. It wasn't even supposed to be about John Sheppard. It was supposed to be Rodney in captivity and making similar choices. And then when I worked the story backward to its starting point, it ended up being Sheppard's tale. This... this is the story it started out as.

This was originally posted in my journal as a couple of scene fragments. It has been doubled in length and tweaked a bit, but it is still not quite my usual linear narrative and maybe should still be a fully fleshed-out story instead of a series of linked vignettes. It's also my first public attempt to write Rodney POV, so that I'm doing this essentially unbetaed and with severe sleep deprivation... But if you can't experiment for your own challenge prompt, then when can you experiment? Comments and whatnot are appreciated because, dude, writing Rodney is hard.

Genfic (duh); ~2000 words. Generic first half of Season Two, but no spoilers.



"The simple fact of it, Colonel, is that you can only get one of us out of here at speed," Rodney said, talking quickly even by his own standards because if he slowed, if he paused, then he'd realize just what he was doing. "The Genii want me alive and there's at least one of them that wants Teyla dead."

"I'm not sacrificing you to--" Sheppard began, but Rodney cut him off.

"If we wait for an opening, they'll get everything they want," he said, forcing himself to look at Sheppard. The look he got back was one of the sort of determined fury that he imagined Sheppard had worn the entire time the Genii had been in Atlantis. "It's not exactly Sophie's Choice here. More like Hobson's."

He looked over at Teyla, lying small and pathetic in Ronon's arms. Barely conscious, brow furrowed in either concentration or pain or both, she trembled and Ronon's arms around her tightened even as he tilted awkwardly to keep his own blood from running into hers. Rodney ignored his own pain, Sheppard's field dressing making the wound nothing more than a sharp throb when he stood still. Walking -- running -- was another matter. The throb became a dagger, slicing up and down his leg, making his knee unresponsive and he cried out involuntarily with each footfall. Even leaning on Sheppard, who was more than half-carrying him, he was too slow. And they all knew it.

"I know you don't leave people behind," Rodney went on after taking a deep breath and closing his eyes. "I know what I'm asking you to do. But if you don't get Teyla back to Atlantis now, she'll die and then we'll still get caught because I'm too slow and then they'll kill you and probably Ronon and I don't want anyone else's death on my hands because I couldn't make the decision on my own."

Sheppard's anger faded for a moment, melting into something close to recognition and maybe even understanding, before returning with a vengeance. "This isn't about Gaul, Rodney."

"It's not," he insisted. "Okay, maybe it is a little, but for god's sake, Colonel, you know I'm right." He licked his dry lips. "Look, you know they want our weapons and our technology and I'm sure if I talk atomic physics at them for a bit, they'll hold off on shooting me until you show up with the rescue. You'll rescue me, right?"

"I'm not ready to let you need rescuing!"

Teyla made noise then, a quiet gasp made all the more terrifying by the accompanying wet gurgle.

"Sheppard," Ronon warned.

"Fine," Sheppard replied, defeated and defiant both. He started opening up pockets of his tactical vest, pulling out various items and replacing them before finally coming up with a tiny device the size of a nickel. He dropped to one knee, reaching out and undoing the knot on the field dressing.

"Stand still," he ordered harshly when Rodney flinched involuntarily at the pain. The device was a tracker, a beacon. And Sheppard was going to bury it next to his thigh bone. Rodney fought back vomit as Sheppard's fingers pressed and pushed at flesh and muscle and he swayed at the feeling of metal and plastic grinding against bone.

"Don't let them look here," Sheppard warned, redressing the wound tightly with the remainder of his already-depleted medical kit. His words dripped fury, but his hands were as gentle as they could be under the circumstances. "Get everything else treated if you can, but not this."



The first thing Rodney did was not show panic when he saw the laughably inadequate shielding on the generator. He was panicking -- in the hyperventilating, oh-my-god-didn't-you-see-the-end-of-Star Trek-2? way -- but, for the first time in what felt like forever, or at least the last time the Genii had him prisoner, he kept it to himself. One day of this wouldn't kill him. Five days of this wouldn't kill him. It would have him getting cancer screenings six times a year once he got back home, but it wouldn't kill him. However, it would, eventually, kill everyone around him. And maybe he'd been in the Pegasus galaxy for too long or maybe he had just finally spent too much time with people like Sheppard and Ronon, but that prospect was increasingly not bothering him. At all.



Rodney hadn't spent almost two decades in academia without learning how to play the game. He chose not to play it, seeing it as a waste of time better spent elsewhere. But he knew the rules and, like everything else that followed a pattern, he was very, very good at it when he bothered to pay attention.

Browbeating colleagues and breaking down challengers and twisting the words of those who would question was not a challenge in the closed, vicious, back-stabbing world of Earth's academic universe. Here it was not even enjoyable because it was too easy. It was like lying to children -- it was lying to children, at least intellectually -- and it was only a couple of hours before he had the brightest minds the Genii had to offer completely turned around on everything from basic atomic structure and electromagnetism to the nature of Ancient technology.

What made it easy was that the Genii were, in fact, more foragers than creators. They were like the Goa'uld -- appropriating from others more than coming up with ideas themselves. As a consequence, they didn't always know the how and the why of what they had. And Rodney, an expert at finding just that chink in an opponent's armor, exploited it ruthlessly.

Couched in terms no less ridiculous than Santa Claus and the Tooth Fairy, Rodney lectured on the history of science, conveniently changing topics before getting to the point of the story where error gave way to truth. He built them a world where Kepler's harmonies of the world were real, Hobbes and Wallis squared the circle, and vision worked by extromission. He veered their calculus into a death spiral that would have them fighting tooth and nail for at least a decade before they got back to Isaac Barrow, forget about Isaac Newton. He left them all of the challenges of Euclid's fifth postulate without giving them any hint that Lobachevsky and Bolyai would throw it over for hyperbolic geometry. He sabotaged their cosmology, their astronomy, their faith in their ability to count past "one, two, many".

He was ruthless and brilliant and, in rare moments, he wished that there was someone there who understood just how brilliant. And then his thigh barked and the tracker shifted against bone and he shivered and remembered that he really, really didn't want anyone else there just now. Not until it was Sheppard and a whole lot of Marines carrying rifles.



When Sheppard did show up, it was with a whole lot of Marines and and great show of force and Rodney heard their approach long before the heavy metal door swung open. It sounded like the audio track of Terminator, the part with the siege of the police station, complete with explosions and screams and the rat-tat-tat of old school pistols (because that's what the Genii had) up against far superior weaponry. The noise drew closer, the screams got louder, and the barked orders of a commander under siege could be heard if you listened closely enough.

Rodney listened.

He also worked. Five armed guards kept watch over him and the four assistants he'd kept -- he'd banished the fifth, a beautiful young blonde with pale skin and sad eyes and not nearly enough insight to be any advantage to the Genii nuclear program; he'd sent her weeping from his sight, publicly belittling her intelligence and privately wishing her a long, healthy life. He barked orders, rewired components, and used sheer force of will and personality to assure that these four prodigies did what he said and not what they had previously thought to be correct and in fact still was.

It took balls of brass to insult a trained engineer -- even by the Genii standards -- into believing that no, he didn't just cross his wires. Especially under the gaze of five twitchy soldiers who weren't sure if they were supposed to kill him before he could escape or be rescued. That he'd done this sort of thing before in this galaxy -- more than once -- didn't make it easier or harder, but it did make the repertoire stronger.

The doors of this level were all closed as a matter of course and Rodney could hear the Marines clearing each room, their voices in the hallways getting closer, the clatter and crash of destruction growing louder. There were fewer screams and more gunfire and the sounds of explosive chemicals being set afire near other human beings.

The door to the lab he was in banged and rattled, but ultimately held when the Marines got to it. Four of the guards took their position and one of them kept his back to them and his rifle on Rodney.

The door was cast iron, bolts as big as his fists, at least three locks that he could see and if it stood up to the battering ram, it didn't hold against explosives. The guards didn't stand against a P-90 set on automatic and then the lab was full of Marines in battle armor, Lieutenant Gillick coming through after the all-clear is given, followed shortly after by Yoni Safir and Sheppard himself.

The four assistants were herded into the hallway. One of them must have made a move. There's one cry and three screams and then nothing. Rodney didn't even wonder which ones it was.

"You okay, McKay?" Sheppard asked, standing back so that Safir could work unencumbered. "Take your time, Doc. We got a minute if you need it."

In the cold, fluorescent light of the medical suites in Atlantis, Safir was usually brusque and unsympathetic and impatient and mean. In a dim, foul-smelling lab, he was brusque and unsympathetic and impatient and possessed of the nimblest fingers this side of Vladimir Horowitz. At his orders, two Marines cleared off a table and unfolded a stretcher and Rodney was on his back with an IV taped in place and his thigh examined before he could even register that Sheppard was still waiting for an answer.

"I'm fine," he said, because it took too much energy to explain all the ways that he wasn't. He'd put everything he had into keeping himself together long enough to be rescued and now he didn't have to do it anymore and all he wanted to do was sleep.

"Torch this place," Sheppard ordered. "Nothing intact."

"No!" Rodney cried out, it coming out more like a petulant whine than he'd have liked with Safir still standing over him. "I spent the last nineteen hours sabotaging everything they have. Let them rebuild from this. They'll destroy themselves and won't know why."

Sheppard gave him a look, one Rodney tried to remember to save for later because it was complicated and rare, but nodded. "Gillick, start the exfil. Patterson and Velendez, you keep an eye on the stretcher and the Doc. We got what we came for, so let's get out of here."

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Date: 2006-03-13 07:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] 2naonh3-cl2.livejournal.com
whee! *hugs fic* you wrote MORE! awesome. i'm glad you wrote more, even though you think writing rodney is hard. it was lovely. ^o^ thank you so much for sharing!

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Date: 2006-03-13 08:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nystana.livejournal.com
Hrm, I liked this. Very different perspective but something that I registered with visually. You have a really good grasp of McKay but I can sympathize on finding it difficult to write him.

Well done.

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Date: 2006-03-13 08:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] slashfictionfan.livejournal.com
*claps*
I love your Rodney POV.. that he can see all the outcomes and work out that 'sacrificing' himself is the best way of surviving.
Also love how you show that he is that smart, that he can convince people up is down and a circle is a square.. It's not all academic intelligence, it's the smarts with hanging round Sheppard too.
Would love to see more of yr Rodney POV, cos you definitely do it well.
Thanks.

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Date: 2006-03-13 10:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ltlj.livejournal.com
I enjoyed this a lot, and I liked the way you wrote Rodney. I especially loved this "I spent the last nineteen hours sabotaging everything they have. Let them rebuild from this. They'll destroy themselves and won't know why." because I think that's exactly what he'd do in that situation.

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Date: 2006-03-13 10:14 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] amalthia
i loved the added parts. :)

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Date: 2006-03-13 10:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] crayonbreakygal.livejournal.com
Such a good twist that you have Rodney sabatoge (sp?) everything. Go, Rodney. He would sacrifice himself like this. I agree that he would be a hard person to write, but you did it brilliantly.

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Date: 2006-03-13 11:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cetpar.livejournal.com
Oops. Sorry for the comment to the orig. post in your LJ. I didn't realize you had posted an expanded version here. I like the added parts. My favorite line in the added parts: "Torch this place," Sheppard ordered. "Nothing intact." Because nothing gets to me like a practical and competent Sheppard. Thanks.

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Date: 2006-03-13 11:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] siegeofangels.livejournal.com
Oh, I like it! The Rodney-voice does seem very real, as does him using his brain to bludgeon the enemy and sabotage their program.

I love how all of your fics share the same universe, how when I got to the part where Sheppard pushes the tracker into Rodney's open wound, my first thought was, "Yoni's gonna kill him."

And it amuses me how both Rodney and the fic itself had been left behind.

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Date: 2006-03-13 11:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] corinna-5.livejournal.com
I love the story of how this story came to be! The ending does feel a little rushed - it took me a bit to figure out what Rodney was up to - but I love the final image of John's complicated look, and everything it says about who Rodney has become.

Thanks for the story, and the challenge prompt idea!

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Date: 2006-03-13 11:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajikia.livejournal.com
Short and intense--very well done. I liked Rodney badgering them down the path of failed scientific theories with nothing more than the force of his personality, and then wishing, just briefly, for someone to appreciate how brilliant he is. It seems very in character.
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Date: 2006-03-14 02:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lalejandra.livejournal.com
I love this -- it's fast and brilliant and incredibly sad.

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Date: 2006-03-14 03:17 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] springwoof.livejournal.com
I loved how you made Rodney a warrior--in his own unique way, he worked to defeat the enemy.

unique insights. great fic.

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Date: 2006-03-14 03:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maisierita.livejournal.com
I'm always thrilled to see new fic by you. :)

I liked this very much, particularly Rodney bowbreating the scientists into thinking everything they knew was wrong, and teaching them the *really* wrong stuff. Because yeah, he so would, if he thought he could get away with it.

And Sheppard pushing the transmitter into Rodney's thigh? Don't know if you meant it that way, but when I read it, it was a way to track him but also a punishment for forcing John to leave him behind. Yes?

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Date: 2006-03-14 03:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkingshadow.livejournal.com
okay, so i'm really, really glad we got the jenny code, but this is fantastic. your rodney is just—he's dead-on, because this is something he might not have done two years ago, or might not even have been *able* to do two years ago, but he's—sadly—so much better at subterfuge and swallowing his fear these days; that is, he's grown an awful lot, and he knows it. and i always love your sheppard and your military and YONI, so thank you so much for this.

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Date: 2006-03-14 06:08 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] cofax7
Excellent.

Again, a very realistic portrayal, both in his smarts and his pragmatism.

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Date: 2006-03-14 06:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jack-pride.livejournal.com
My adoration for this McKay knows no bounds. No bounds, I tell you.

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Date: 2006-03-14 07:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] livrelibre.livejournal.com
This is the warrior McKay I can see, esp. the ending. Sun Tzu for Scientists:)

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Date: 2006-03-14 08:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] not-sally.livejournal.com
Darkish, but awesome.

Perfect Rodney

Date: 2006-03-14 10:41 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Absolutely perfect. Your effort paid off as an exciting and tense tale.

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Date: 2006-03-14 12:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] palebluebell.livejournal.com
Poor Genii, they never stood a chance against a spectacularly pissed off McKay; I could really see Rodney doing this if he was annoyed enough.

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Date: 2006-03-14 12:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flaming-muse.livejournal.com
Ooh, I *love* the idea of Rodney feeding the Genii just the right information to get them going in entirely the wrong direction. Love it.

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Date: 2006-03-14 12:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zing_och.livejournal.com
I really liked this. Thank you!

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Date: 2006-03-14 09:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladyvyola.livejournal.com
As [livejournal.com profile] secret_sybarite says above, Sun Tzu for Scientists, indeed!

Rodney brings a scientist's perspective to the definition of victory -- don't destroy your enemies, destroy their future. Twist their science, alter their past, lead them down dark dead ends. Imprison them in ignorance and superstition.

Knowledge is power. By that standard, Rodney is Atlantis's ultimate weapon.

::gets to use the icon keyworded wrong wrong wrong!::

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Date: 2006-03-15 01:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] benbenberi.livejournal.com
Good take on Rodney -- he's got the knowledge and the arrogance to take down a whole civilization with the power of his brain alone, if he has to. Yeah!

(And it's always nice to see Dr. Safir showing up. I love your OCs -- wish they were real!)
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