I thought this was a lovely piece - welcome to the flash fic fold! *g*
perched on the couch with her laptop trying to convince Word to ignore "Chaya."
*snort* I'm sure Rodney could find a way to make it do that.
I liked the sense of putting things off in this - that's true to depression in many ways, and it's also the way friendships fade away. After a while, people feel bad about not calling and then they don't call and so on. I think you captured that very well, and the last one especially - Simon's message still on the machine - really seemed to be the event that broke Elizabeth after losing Atlantis, and the others spill from that. I liked the format of this - think it worked well.
Small thing - in the second section, it's hard to determine which "she" is being referred to in the first bit, either Teyla or Elizabeth. I can be more specific if you need, but I had to read the beginning over more than once.
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calls never made
Date: 2006-10-03 04:08 am (UTC)perched on the couch with her laptop trying to convince Word to ignore "Chaya."
*snort* I'm sure Rodney could find a way to make it do that.
I liked the sense of putting things off in this - that's true to depression in many ways, and it's also the way friendships fade away. After a while, people feel bad about not calling and then they don't call and so on. I think you captured that very well, and the last one especially - Simon's message still on the machine - really seemed to be the event that broke Elizabeth after losing Atlantis, and the others spill from that. I liked the format of this - think it worked well.
Small thing - in the second section, it's hard to determine which "she" is being referred to in the first bit, either Teyla or Elizabeth. I can be more specific if you need, but I had to read the beginning over more than once.
Thanks for sharing this piece.