(fic) Kizu, by Vega
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sga_flashficKizu
By losyark
Challenge: Scars
Characters: Miko Kusanagi, Peter Grodin
Spoilers: Nothing specific. Season 1.
Rating: PG-13
Author’s Notes: No, seriously, why do I only write Miko stories when I’m in airports? This is a companion piece to “Zoh-Onna Omote” and “Tadaima”.
Summary: “Miko? Keep talking... I’ll follow your voice...”
***
“Where am I?”
“Dareh?”
“Hello? Who was that? Can you hear me?”
“Dareh desu ka?”
“Who’s there?”
“Ko-konnichi wa? Wa-watashi wa... Miko... anno, Kusanagi Miko, desu...”
“Miko? Miko! Is that you?”
“Hai.”
“It’s Peter.”
“Peter...?”
“Peter Grodin.”
“... Peter...”
“Hello? Hello? Miko? Why can’t I see you?”
“Peter! Chigaou...”
“What? Miko, speak English! I can’t understand you.”
“I am! I mean, I thought I was... Peter.”
“Yes. Miko, where are you?”
“I... I’m here. Can you... chikusho ... this has to be a... a mistake.”
“Keep talking. I’m following your voice. What’s a mistake?”
“This.”
“...don’t stop talking, Miko. What’s a mistake?”
“You can’t actually be here.”
“I don’t even know where I – we – are. So how can you know I can’t be here?”
“Because you’re--”
“... I’m what?”
“You... you’re... you’ve gone to the weapon’s platform.”
“I have? I mean... I did?”
“Yes – with Doctor McKay and--”
“—Yes! Yes, of course I did. With the generators.”
“Yes.”
“And we shot down one of the Wraith Hiveships.”
“Yes.”
“So... what’s this then? Some sort of Ancient Communication program I initialized by mistake? Am I communicating directly with Atlantis? That’s helpful!”
“No, Peter.”
“Sure, it is!”
“That’s not what I meant--”
“Are you back on Atlantis?”
“Yes. I... I’m in the medical storage lab. We’ve been sorting through the databased items. The equipment that...”
“Really? That’s odd. Why would something that can create a connection like this have been in a medical storage facility? ...Miko? Miko? Hey, hey, don’t stop talking, now, I think I’m getting closer.”
“I’m scared.”
“Hey, no, I’m almost there, its okay.”
“P-Peter, I--”
“Are you okay?”
“No.”
“Are you... hold on, Miko, keep talking.”
“This can’t be happening.”
“Keep talking Miko, don’t panic on me.”
“This can’t be happening!”
“Deep breaths, just keep talking. Tell me... tell me about your family.”
“I... uh... my family. My mother is a homemaker – my father works for Daiwa House. He runs numbers. My brother in laws, I have two, they do the same. My older sister just had another son.”
“That’s great, what’s his name?”
“Shinsuke.”
“Nice name. What else? What about grandparents?”
“My, uh, my grandfather was a mask-maker. He died last year – I bought his house in
“Is it beautiful?”
“Yes. It’s the most beautiful house in
“Will you take me some day?”
“Oh, god...”
“Miko? Don’t panic! I’m so close! I... tell me who told you I like banana walnut muffins.”
“Doctor Beckett. You knew it was me?”
“Of course. You draw the same droopy eyes on the napkin-pandas and your doodles in staff meetings.”
“You knew.”
“I know, present tense.”
“Past. You knew and you never--”
“Hey, I’m a little shy when it comes to pretty girls, okay?”
“... P-Peter...”
“Miko? Are you crying?”
“No! No... no, I... I’m sorry, Peter.”
“What? What for?”
“This isn’t real.”
“Of course it is. I’m going to find you and when I get back to Atlantis we’ll take this thing apart and figure out what happened and then I’ll suck it up and finally ask you to go watch a sunset with me.”
“No, Peter.”
“What do you mean, no? I thought you--”
“You never made it back.”
“What?”
“Y-you never came back. To Atlantis. The platform, it... the Wraith... there was only one shot before... Peter...”
“Miko, is that you?”
“Yes!”
“You’re warm. Your face is wet.”
“Peter!”
“Shhh.”
“This isn’t happening.”
“Yes, it is. You must have been thinking about me – the device, probably a psychic link--”
“No.”
“You can’t know that for sure.”
“No Ancient device can bring back the dead.”
“... dead?”
“The platform was destroyed. You were on it, Peter.”
“I...”
“It’s been two years since then.”
“...two...”
“Ah! Peter, you’re... you’re hurting me...”
“Oh, oh, Miko, I’m sorry, I... I don’t understand what’s happening.”
“I don’t either. The device wasn’t supposed to work like this. It was supposed to be epidermal.”
“So you know what it’s supposed to do?”
“Yes. No. I thought I did!”
“So, where are we then?”
“I don’t know. My mind, maybe? My heart? Somewhere else? Somewhere... after?”
“After? You mean like... we’re d-de...”
“Dead.”
“Dead.”
“I don’t think I’m dead.”
“How can I be in your mind if I am?”
“I don’t know.”
“Am I real?”
“I don’t know.”
“I feel real. You feel real.”
“I don’t know!”
“Shh, shh, it’s okay. I’m here...”
“No, you’re not!”
“Shhh, shhh, I’ve got you.”
“... I’m sorry.”
“Don’t be, it’s ah... understandable, I guess. Am I figment of your imagination?”
“I don’t know.”
“Well, how is this remotely epidermal? Medical? How is this healing anything? It’s just torture!”
“Maybe that’s what it’s supposed to be.”
“That’s awful!”
“I know. I’m sorry.”
“What for?”
“Conjuring you up, maybe? Pulling you away from... whatever?”
“I don’t remember it, Miko. I don’t recall dying.”
“That’s good. No pain.”
“... yeah. Miko...”
“Yes?”
“Do you... do you miss me? Does anyone?”
“Of course we do! I do. Everyday. At night, I light a candle.”
“You do?”
“Yes. For you.”
“Why?”
“So you can find me, if you want.”
“I want.”
“I want you to.”
“I’ll try, then. Tonight, I’ll try.”
“I wish I--”
“I wish I had, too.”
“You’re only saying that because you’re a figment of my imagination and I want you to say it. I want closure.”
“Maybe. Do you care?”
“No.”
“Neither do I.”
“Are you... are you really here?”
“I don’t know.”
“Will you try to find the candle?”
“Yes. I... Miko, what are you...mmm. Oh. Oh. Your lips are soft.”
“Mmm.”
“Just... let me... mm. Just like I thought it – oh.”
“Peter.”
“Miko.”
“I – I’m sorry.”
“Me too, Miko. I – Miko. Miko? Miko? Miko! Don’t! Where did you – Miko!”
***
“Kusanagi?”
“Yes?”
“You were muttering. In Japanese.”
“Sorry.”
“Did device heal scar?”
“Yes, Radek. A little.”
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Date: 2007-05-06 09:13 pm (UTC)Poor Miko. Poor Peter.
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Date: 2007-05-07 03:44 am (UTC)It tells a story without TELLING and I I think it`s neat.
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Date: 2007-05-07 03:52 am (UTC)Yeah, and it makes the reader pay attention and think, because they don't know any more than the speakers.
That last line of Peter's really makes me wonder - it seems a bit more than a mere echo could manage. Is there hope for our hero? Or is it just wishful thinking on my part?
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Date: 2007-05-07 04:25 am (UTC)I figured it was the last things Miko was hearing as she was pulled out of the coma/stasis/off the device/out of the chamber/ etc. She was fading out and SHE knew she was fading and therefore her memory of Peter would know she was fading...
But now you have me thinking.
Is there hope for our hero?
Guess we`ll just have to wait to see what the next challenge is! And if I fly anywhere else soon...
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Date: 2007-05-07 02:49 am (UTC)That was heartbreaking, but I'm glad that you continued the series and I hope that you keep writing Miko because this was exquisite.
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Date: 2007-05-07 03:40 am (UTC)it`s odd.
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Date: 2007-05-07 06:49 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2007-05-07 06:39 am (UTC)“Yes, Radek. A little.
*shivers* Poor Miko!
Really enjoying your Miko fics here!
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Date: 2007-05-07 06:44 am (UTC)I`m looking forward to the next challenge, to see what Miko-story it inspires.
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Date: 2007-05-07 07:54 am (UTC)Oookay, it's getting late and I'm babbling. Sorry! And thank you for sharing these lovely stories!
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Date: 2007-05-09 03:24 am (UTC)Hm....
You`re feeding the wrong Plot Bunnies, you know.
*Points at the starving Across Time (http://www.mediaminer.org/fanfic/view_st.php?id=113122&submit=View) bunnies* They need to be fed first. THEN I`m allowed to write Miko!fic.
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Date: 2007-05-10 03:04 am (UTC)As for "Across Time", I love the first chapter so I'm definitely going to be reading that one a bit at a time as well, even though I desperately hate WIPs (just because of the damn recalcitrant bunnies that always seem to be their bane). I always loved Ares and miss Kevin Smith, thank you for writing him into your Mary Sue (which is damn funny, by the way)!
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Date: 2007-05-10 08:52 am (UTC)I'm glad that you're liking AT so far - it's not totally a WIP - I've only got three chapters left, and each of those are abotu 80% written. It's just being bitchy right now, and things aren't ... slotting right. You know, when something goes together so well you just go "aaaaah, yes." Well, it doesn't want to DO that right now.
I miss Kevin Smith too. I keep thinking about how neat it would be if AT was picked up to make a spin off series - I made a point of trying to fix all the show's continuity errors - but there's no way it would be the same without him...
Hopefully by the time you get to chapter twenty, I'll have 21,22,and 23 done, so it won't be a WIP any more!
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Date: 2007-05-10 07:08 pm (UTC)Thanks for pointing me to AT (I read through up to Ch6 last night)! Boy, I'd forgotten what a jerk Ares can be.
Yes, no show with Ares would be quite as good without Kevin Smith. You'd have to settle for someone else and dedicate the pilot to Kevin (if you so desired). Another prospect for the role would be Jason Momoa, if he'd take it (if the show was filmed during SGA's hiatus period).
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Date: 2007-05-11 03:35 am (UTC)WIPs annoy me when they don`t want to be finished!
Wow, you`re reading AT fast... I`ll have to speed up if I`m going to finish before you get to the end.
Yeah, Ares was a total asshole in the show - the thing was, it was all in character, which is hard to do. Making someone a jerk is easy. Making someone a jerk in CHARACTER is not.
Jason Momoa is a bit lean for Ares. What about Noah Danby (http://www.thescifiworld.net/interviews/noah_danby_01.htm)? He does `fierce` well. (But I know for a fact he`s a sweetie in person).
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Date: 2007-05-11 04:08 am (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2007-05-07 11:56 pm (UTC)By the way... "soukan" tte doo kakimasu ka? I'm not sure which word you meant.
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Date: 2007-05-09 06:31 am (UTC)And thank you! I was originally going to flesh out the prose after I had recorded all the dialogue, but realized it was telling enough without it...
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Date: 2007-05-18 07:11 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2007-05-18 07:43 am (UTC)*slinks off to fix*
Review
Date: 2007-05-09 04:04 am (UTC)--Silverthreads
Re: Review
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Date: 2007-06-12 01:52 am (UTC)Glad that you`ve enjoyed these stories.
ACK, don`t SAY that! I dunno what will happen... I assume the series will stop, who knows? It all really hinges on the challenges - I`ve decided to try to just make the series from the challenges. I know vaugely where I want it to go, but the challenges will dictate what happens and when.
That way it`s not REALLY a WIP so I`m free to do all the other millions WIPs I have going right now...
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Date: 2007-12-29 03:34 am (UTC)Wonderful series. ^^
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Date: 2009-11-27 02:31 pm (UTC)At least he knows there's a candle.
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Date: 2009-11-28 01:52 am (UTC)--Silverthreads