Splash, by kassrachel [Backstory challenge]

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Hi again. So I didn't want to neglect Rodney, right? I joked to lamardeuse that once she gave me the thumbs-up on my previous (John-centric) piece of flashfic, I ought to write something focusing on Rodney, maybe even something with a little sex in it. Next thing I knew, there was this. (Thanks to lamardeuse for giving this a once-over!)

Title: Splash
Word count: 500
Rating: um, adult?
Character/pairing: Rodney McKay/OMC
Summary: "And then there was the invitation."

Splash



Rodney's first blowjob happened in the guest bathroom at Clarisse Peterson's pool house, the summer he was fifteen. He'd mapped out the branching probability tree of everything that was likely to happen at Clarisse's sweet sixteen, down to who he thought he might try to flirt with and how spectacularly that flirtation would fail.

He hadn't, however, factored serendipity into the picture. In this case, running from an angry wasp (there might have been others! What if it had friends?) into the downstairs bathroom, not realizing Todd Stanislavski had just let himself in there.

There was an awkward moment during which Rodney blushed and stammered and felt like eleven kinds of idiot, but then Todd smiled at him -- a confident goalie smile -- and unzipped his fly.

This was nothing like standing next to another guy in a public men's room. For one thing, there was only the one commode, and Todd wasn't even facing it. And then there was the invitation. All Todd said was, "You want to?" and Rodney's life turned upside-down.

Todd might have said something else, but it was drowned out by the rushing of blood in Rodney's ears. He sank to the floor, sparing half a thought to be thankful for the shag rug in front of the sink. He licked his lips, and the hunger he saw in Todd's eyes in that moment was heady and gratifying and made him open his mouth and take Todd in.

Rodney was dimly aware of his own wet swim trunks, clammy against his skin in the air-conditioned room. He was profoundly aware that he was doing something that was really against the rules -- the kind of thing that could get a guy's ass kicked, especially a guy who was already younger than everyone else in his supposed peer group. (Right. Like these people were his peers in any way.)

But mostly he was aware of the feel of Todd's dick in his mouth. It was bigger than he'd expected, and the skin was softer. He felt clumsy and unpracticed, but Todd apparently didn't care; he was gasping, pushing forward like Rodney's mouth was the best thing ever. Rodney's own dick strained against the net lining of his swimsuit, aching.

It was over surprisingly fast. Rodney choked a little and swallowed hard, and blinked a few times.

Todd reached a hand down and helped him stand. His mouth was tingling and standing too fast made him dizzy.

"Thanks, McKay," Todd said, still smiling. "You're all right."

And then Todd left, and Rodney stared at himself in the mirror. He reached down to finish himself off, startled by how his dick surged in his hand as he watched his pale reflection's fist moving, his thumb stroking over the tip --

When he went back out to the party, he made a beeline for the pool and cannonballed into the deep end. In that moment -- sated, surprised, burning with possibility -- he didn't care how big of a splash he made.

(500 words)

Comments

[mibloodapproves.livejournal.com]

he didn't care how big of a splash he made.

YOU GO, RODNEY! :D

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

::beam::

I know! Isn't he adorable? :-)

Glad you enjoyed.

[adafrog.livejournal.com]

Oh wow. Great story.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

[2ndary-author.livejournal.com]

I think I liked this even better than the John story (shut up, it is *not* because I like Rodney better. Don't listen to them, John, you know I don't have favorites!) It's an interesting moment to pick, especially since Rodney knows the kind of trouble he could get into. I like the details--the air-conditioning, the goalie smile--and how they didn't drag the action down. And the internal monologue was very spot-on.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Hee! I'm so glad you liked it, and especially glad the details worked for you.

For the record, I love your ferris wheel icon. (Oh, John.)

[nestra.livejournal.com]

In that moment -- sated, surprised, burning with possibility -- he didn't care how big of a splash he made.

Rodney! For the win!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Rodney FTW! ::grin::

Thinking of him, I'm positively goofy with glee. :-)

[scififreak.livejournal.com]

The last line really does say it all. Rodney ftw.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you enjoyed! Thank you.

[fairestcat]

*loves*

Oh, Rodney *squishes him*

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

::grin:: (Oh, Rodney.)

Glad you enjoyed!

[kimberlite.livejournal.com]

Oh cool -- angry wasp(s), goalie smile, shag rug, clammy swim trunks, peer group, net lining, beeline, and a fabulous last line to tie it all together. Go Rodney. :)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Yay! I'm so glad you liked it -- plus, you just listed all of my favorite little details, which makes me happy indeed. :-)

[wickedwords.livejournal.com]

That was a fun moment! I loved the last line.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much, hon!

[emeraldsword.livejournal.com]

I liked this. Everyone else has already said all the things I wanted to, so I'll just say that you got a lot in to just 500 words! Love the cannonballing (partly because that's such a youth thing, and it's the external reflection of an internal moment, which is also very cool) and the way that it wasn't the first blowjob Rodney got (as I assumed from the first line) but the first he had anything to do with in any way, which was better. So, well done.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm glad the cannonballing worked for you; it was a very visceral image for me, and given that Rodney as an adult has a tendency to be kind of brash and to throw himself into situations, it seemed appropriate. :-)

[dr-mn-anderson.livejournal.com]

The wasp! What if it has friends? Eek!

Oh, Rodney. :D

....

*belatedly realizes that she's replying with her atlantis_reborn character journal*

Hi, it's leaper182. *blush*

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Hee! Nice to meet you, Dr. Miles. :-)

And I'm glad you enjoyed!

[dr-mn-anderson.livejournal.com]

I likes mah character. :D

[abbylee]

I love the language and imagery here - everything from the branching probability tree to the cannonball.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :-)

There's a reason I gravitate toward Rodney, and it's that I am a great big geek. (Well -- that, and that he's pretty. *g*) So it's fun to be able to put my geekery to work in writing fic...

[treewishes.livejournal.com]

Go, Rodney! (and yay for geeky blow jobs!)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Geeky blow jobs ftw!

:-) So glad you enjoyed, hon.

[ozsaur.livejournal.com]

Such a joyful feeling at the end. Loved it!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm glad it came across as joyful; that's exactly what I was hoping for. :-) Glad you enjoyed it!

[springwoof.livejournal.com]

yay, young!Rodney! I think you caught the proto-Rodney in the wild, as it were. very neat, great, vivid details...

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you liked it, and glad it seems to you that I captured proto-Rodney correctly. :-)

[accidentalfan.livejournal.com]

This and the John story were both very good. To get such good characterization and development in such a short space is a talent. I'm a very concise, packed, writer myself, and always enjoy it when other people do that well. Thanks for posting!

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked both of these little vignettes -- they were a pleasure to write.

And I'm glad concision works for you. :-)

[helens78]

OMGSQUEE. This was so wonderful. It's young!Rodney. It's a first-time story. It's blowjob fic. It's hot as hell. It's great from start to finish.

Loved the spare but excellent description (my favorite!). :D I also loved the way this fic acknowledges Rodney's position as a social outsider and the awkwardness that entails, but also gives Rodney his trademark streak of bravado about it and lets him have a little moment of triumph. Little moments of triumph are worth a lot, and I hope this is a memory Rodney carries with him. :)

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you liked this little piece; thank you so much for saying so. I'm especially glad that both the social outsider stuff, and the trademark streak of bravado, came through. (Oh, Rodney. :-)

[shalom]

Fantastic capture of a first-time moment from Rodney's POV.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed.

[lobelia321.livejournal.com]

111111

Whoa. Best line: Thanks, McKay. You are all right. I like the deadpan-ness of it.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it.

[(Anonymous)]

111111

Whoa. Best line: Thanks, McKay. You are all right. I like the deadpan-ness of it.

[monanotlisa.livejournal.com]

Whoa -- this is fantastic; what a good Rodney voice, especially in such a short piece.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it, and especially that the voice seemed right to you. I'm a relative newcomer to this fandom, but I already love the characters an awful lot. :-)

[sor-bet.livejournal.com]

He'd mapped out the branching probability tree of everything that was likely to happen at Clarisse's sweet sixteen

Okay, that line made me laugh out loud, hard, without even reading further. SO Rodney. :-D

I especially liked the reason he went into the bathroom. Following another guy into a bathroom for sex is not Rodney; fleeing a potential wasp attack totally is. XD

Nice little moment out of a summer.

[kassrachel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

This little vignette still makes me smile. I love Rodney a ton. :-)