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Title: Five Things John Can't Help But Notice
Author: [livejournal.com profile] xparrot
Words: 600 (5 drabbles + one for the road)
Pairing: John/Rodney
Rating: PG
Notes: So I've been watching various sources of Hewlett-y goodness, and it's occurred to me that I might have a wee little crush on David Hewlett. But that's okay, because John Sheppard has a huge massive one on Rodney McKay.




The thing is, noses aren't anything special; to call a nose unnoticeable is about the best compliment you can expect. But Rodney's is so neatly shaped, the bridge so sharply narrow, that occasionally, when John's tired, he struggles not to reach out and stroke one finger down its length, swoop down the ski-jump slope of it to launch off the pointed tip.

He always stops himself in time, but when the winds of the latest snow planet have reddened Rodney's ears and that quick point, John has to stick his hands in his pockets, pretending it's to keep them warm.



Rodney's eyes aren't as blue as Carson's, electric and striking; but they're clear like the seas around Atlantis, and when he's panicked they're huge enough to swallow his whole face entire, big as a billboard advertising every skipped beat of his heart.

More than that, though, it's the lashes. John doesn't remember when he first noticed them—not for a while, somehow, astonishingly; and then one day Rodney blinked and whoa. It's good they're pale, brown like his hair, because if they were darker he'd be mistaken for wearing mascara. Even so, when they catch the light, John's caught breathless.



It's the snap of his fingers, click click click, and the whole city jumps to attention—no, it's the 127 wpm he boasts of, and if you watch him type he backspaces once in twenty minutes—no, it's the way he can't find enough words no matter how fast his tongue moves, so his hands have to paint his extra thoughts in the air—no, it's the fidget and twitch when he's thinking, and snap-clap-bounce off his fists when he's got the answer—no, it's him placing the ZPM, rock-steady, wonder in his face but it never trembles—no, it's—



One time in the showers, for reasons John never deduced or asked about, Ronon casually dropped his hand and smacked McKay's ass, not to hurt, but hard enough that the slap echoed off the tiles. "What?" Rodney shrieked, and wrapped a protective towel around his pinkened posterior as he glared and muttered dire threats of harassment and lawsuits, and Ronon just grinned.

Not like John never noticed before, hard to miss in the showers, that it's full and heart-shaped and really kind of perfect, but it's the sound, that round ample smack, that John can't get out of his mind.



Rodney's mouth is a down-slanting slash, when he's upset and his lips press flat; when he's worried both sides drag down. When he's yelling—shouting or screaming, both are memorable—his mouth opens wide and dark, square teeth showing blunt behind.

John doesn't see Rodney smile much. Partly because Rodney doesn't, nervous chuckles but never a laugh, and rarely a real grin. Mostly because John has to look away, those prized moments when Rodney's eternal excitement transmutes to joy—nothing would give John away faster than the way when Rodney really smiles, he has no choice but to return it.



Another day, another planet, another death-defying mission. Ronon's gun saved their lives and Teyla's words brokered the peace, but Rodney's the one who got the villagers' Ancient agriculture machine working again, in time to keep a local feud from boiling over into open war. John did his part, kibitzing to keep Rodney on track, but in the end the day is McKay's.

"Good job, Rodney," John tells him on the walk back to the gate.

"Yes, yes," Rodney replies, sarcastic, though he bounces a bit on his toes, "I know, you only love me for my brain."

"Right," John says.
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Date: 2008-07-22 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cindyjade.livejournal.com
this was adorable! :)

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Date: 2008-07-22 03:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mercury973.livejournal.com
Oh, I could write sonnets about David’s eyelashes.

I loved this *this* much. I just love watching the two of them together. John looks absolutely smitten with Rodney. And who can blame him?

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Date: 2008-07-22 05:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tatsumaki.livejournal.com
I have totally not thought about the ski jump thing before. Absolutely not.

I love, love, love this, because of John's hilarious/adorable/sad obsession, but also because Ronon is the only person in this universe or any other who can make harassment funny and sexy. Awww.

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Date: 2008-07-22 08:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adannu.livejournal.com
Awww, John. This is lovely. Especially the bit about returning Rodney's smile.

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Date: 2008-07-22 01:33 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] astridv.livejournal.com
So totally spot on. Kickass last line!

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Date: 2008-07-22 02:13 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] monanotlisa.livejournal.com
Sweet but keenly observed -- by you, not necessarily our dear John Sheppard. *g* And oh, the final line!

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Date: 2008-07-22 03:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] miscellanny.livejournal.com
That's gorgeous. I'm really impressed at how well that was put together.

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Date: 2008-07-23 06:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stargated.livejournal.com
If you were trying to sell me on the good ship McShep, I think you just might have.

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Date: 2008-07-23 03:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] epicycles.livejournal.com
Oh My God, Ronon slapping Rodney's ass will be stuck in my head all day.

Thank you, that whole fic made me smile like crazy.

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Date: 2008-07-27 03:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] schizojuc.livejournal.com
Aww! Love the fic. The nose and lashes are my favourite bit. I also have to comment on the Hewlett crush because...well I'm a victim too. =)

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Date: 2008-07-27 03:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] saena17.livejournal.com
Aww! *super warm fuzzies* I love these two!!

(And I have a little crush on David Hewlett too. It's okay. ;) )

Sarah

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Date: 2008-07-27 05:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darsynia.livejournal.com
That last line was SPOT ON. I really, really liked this, a lot. Thanks for writing it!

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Date: 2008-07-27 06:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] scoob2222.livejournal.com
heee, love the last line, very sweet

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Date: 2008-07-27 07:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mecurtin.livejournal.com
"Right," John says.

-- this is perfect, because we can just hear John's drawly, sarcastic, what-the-heck-does-he-mean-by-that voice -- and this story exposes the things that could be underneath it.

Oh John Sheppard, would you be so much fun if you had the therapy you clearly need?

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Date: 2008-07-27 09:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] catvampcrazines.livejournal.com
Mmm. Sweet fic, hun! *sighs happily*

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Date: 2008-07-28 03:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sp23.livejournal.com
You know, I could actually hear that smack on Rodney's backside. LOL

These were all great. Poor John, all that longing so tightly bottled up.

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Date: 2008-07-28 09:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rohaa.livejournal.com
That was great! I loved the snapsnapsnap, and the ending, with Rodney all oblivious and thinking John isn't noticing EVERYTHING ELSE about him...awesome. Well done!

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Date: 2008-07-28 12:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kaj-22.livejournal.com
Lovely! and trust Ronon to do something that John wishes he could ;)

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Date: 2008-08-02 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] panisdead.livejournal.com
Round ample smack, mmmmmmmm. :)

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Date: 2008-08-06 03:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladybugkay.livejournal.com
What a wonderful little gem of a ficlet. It's got all those wonderful things to love about Mckay (and Hewlett), all from the most obvious perspective: John's.

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Date: 2008-09-15 05:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] raiining.livejournal.com
Mmmm! Lovely moments! And great last line ;)

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Date: 2009-08-19 02:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sor-bet.livejournal.com
I've read a lot of John-notices-Rodney-and-finally-gives-in-to-it fic, but this is the first that leaves off before that point, and I love the tension, and it also seems a little sad, John holding himself back like that. I like to think that one day John will snape and say or do something. Maybe it even happens in the very next line after the end, if Rodney hears something in the way John answered. But I do like that you left it off here. :-) I also really like how you showed the way the team works, in the last paragraph.
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