Atlantis Waits by Dzurlady (Documentation Challenge)

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Title: Atlantis Waits
Author: dzurlady
Rating: G
Spoilers: Rising, Before I Sleep
Disclaimer: Stargate Atlantis is not mine
Summary: Extracts from the main status logs


6/5/8,827: Initial status check
Power conservation mode initialised
ZPM497-RTS online\ 98%
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD offline
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Enter standby

6/5/10,493: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS online\ 51%
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD offline
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Resume standby

6/5/12,159: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS online\ 0.1%
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD offline
Execute command: deactivate stasis unit
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Prepare for stasis unit deactivation

6/5/12,160: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX online\ 99.9%
ZPM264-NHD offline
Stasis unit deactivation complete
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 2
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ offline

Ready for stasis unit reactivation
Resume standby

6/5/13,826: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX online\ 52%
ZPM264-NHD offline
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Resume standby

6/5/15,492: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX online\ 0.1%
ZPM264-NHD offline
Execute command: deactivate stasis unit
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Prepare for stasis unit deactivation

6/5/15,493: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD online\ 99.9%
Stasis unit deactivation complete
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 2
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ offline

Ready for stasis unit reactivation
Resume standby

6/5/17,159: Automatic status check
{power conservation mode}
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD online\ 53%
Systems check:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ locked down
...........internal sensors\ offline
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ offline
...........life support\ level 1
...........primary database\ offline
...........stasis unit\ online

Resume standby

6/5/18,746: Unscheduled status check
Gate activation command received
Origin: Terre
Execute command: unlock gate
Reactivation initialised
ZPM497-RTS offline
ZPM362-TYX offline
ZPM264-NHD online\ 2%
Initialise primary systems:

...........shield\ online
...........gate\ unlocked
...........life support\ level 3
...........internal sensors\ initialised
...........proximity sensors\ offline
...........long range sensors\ offline
...........communications systems\ initialised
...........primary database\ initialised
...........stasis unit\ online

ALERT: ZPM264-NHD at 0.004%
Shield failure imminent
Engage safety mechanism: detach city moorings
Entering operations mode

Comments

[buddleia.livejournal.com]

Oh, lovely. I really like this kind of thing, it gave me goosebumps when cesperanza did it in a flashfic and it gives me goosebumps now.

[jen-chan13.livejournal.com]

flashfic?! where???? cause, okay, yeah, this rocked so~o much, and flashfic of this? EVEN BETTER!!!!! it was so interesting to read through the entries and match them up to what was happening, it really mkes me think. this in conjunction with 'before i sleep' is awesome. ^____^

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm pleased to hear you were trying to match it all up, because that was what I was aiming for but I was afraid I'd lose people along the way. :) It was great fun to write, too, even if the dates did my head in slightly until I got them all worked out.

[buddleia.livejournal.com]

It was Breathe (http://www.trickster.org/speranza/cesper/Breathe.html), and the little section of data in the middle made me absolutely shiver.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

cesperanza has done one like it? Cool! Do you know what challenge it was for? It sounds interesting.
Glad you liked the fic, too. :)

[buddleia.livejournal.com]

'Breathe', and I think it was the city challenge but I could be wrong. I loved this for the same reasons I loved that.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks for the link - it was interesting. :)

[just-eunice.livejournal.com]

Oh wow. I was surprised by how much this affected me. The sparse system reports evoked all the emotions I felt watching Before I Sleep (OMG TEN THOUSAND YEARS), and then hammered them home with the simplicity and repetition. Really interesting, thank you so much.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I thought about cutting out some of the reports, to make it shorter, because I worried that I'd lose people along the way; but that was kinda the point - that there had been 10,000 of very little activity, and all of it routine. Altantis was just hanging around in limbo until the expedition arrived. :) I like the status report at the end as well, because we know that Elizabeth is still there, and the expedition won't discover her for several months yet.

[spike21.livejournal.com]

man. I can't believe how moving this was. Just brilliantly done.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you - I'm glad you liked it.

[zoerayne]

So simple and elegant, yet so very affecting. Wonderfully done, thank you!

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Oh, good - I'm glad it worked for you. I wasn't sure that I would be able to communicate what I was getting at without confusing and/or boring people, so it's really nice to hear you say that.

[allisnow.livejournal.com]

This was... unexpectedly awesome. :) Very nice.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm happy to hear you liked it.

[svmadelyn.livejournal.com]

Oh, that was really cool and unique. *claps happily*

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks! There's been some really cool fic to come out of this challenge in structures that I'd never have thought of, so it's nice for someone to say that about mine. :) It's a good challenge.

[paradise-city.livejournal.com]

Ooh, different and awesome. Excellent.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[wychwood]

Wow. This is incredibly simple, but still gave me goosebumps just thinking about it.

Awesome.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks :)

[torakowalski.livejournal.com]

Wow. Just wow.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :)

[adannu.livejournal.com]

oh, wow. *shiver*

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Also, that's a really nice icon. :)

[haphazardmethod.livejournal.com]

What a clever idea, and more affecting than I expected when I started it.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you! And thanks for sticking it to the end. :)

[permetaform]

::shivers:: nice!

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thanks! :) Glad you liked it.

[ex-nilahasi174.livejournal.com]

Wow. Very nicely done. Great job!

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[raincitygirl.livejournal.com]

Oh, that's such a neat, and effective, and unususal way of writing a story. Well done.

[dzurlady.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much, especially for commenting so long after I posted the story! I wanted to write something from Atlantis's perspective and I'm pleased it worked for you. :)