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Title: The List
Author: seekergeek
Rating: G
Characters: Chuck the nameless gate tech POV
Disclaimer: Owned by someone who isn't me
Unbeta'd - inform me of any errors
Summary: They have a list, and it's Chuck's job to maintain it.

Chuck sat down at his station and went over the list of missing people from various gate teams. Lt. Flora Hernandez.  Dr. Sven Bjorkson.  Sgt. David Thorkle.  Sgt. William Colquitt.   Dr. Rodney McKay. Chuck sighed. It had been an extremely bad week for many of the gate teams.  Colonel Sheppard was practically beside himself with anger and was riding the search and rescue teams as mercilessly as he could from a bed in the infirmary. Dr. Weir had given up sleeping in favor haunting the gateroom late into the night in hopes of good word from the rescue teams. The last time they'd had this many people unaccounted for had been during the siege. Chuck shuddered in memory.

 

The evening went by quietly, disturbed only by the regular check-ins from various rescue teams. The message was always the same. Nothing yet. At around 2 am there a brief surge of hope went through the gateroom when one of the rescue teams called before check-in. Chuck listened closely to their report and his chest tightened. They'd found Sgt. Thorkle and Dr. Bjorkson. Both been killed in a fall trying to escape the Wraith. The bodies were being bagged and they expected to be back in Atlantis in an hour or so. Chuck watched Dr. Weir turn white and nod stiffly before thanking the team and signing off the radio. Chuck checked the names off the list with dry eyes as being accounted for. Three more left to be found. There was nothing else of note for the rest of the night.

 

Chuck slid into his chair for the next evening shift and saw that the list still stubbornly contained the same three names. He knew that if anybody else had been found he'd have heard via the grapevine long before he got here for his shift, but he'd still hoped. He ran through his routine checks and settled in for another long night. The night was thinning into daylight when the next unscheduled activation occurred. One of the rescue teams, coming in hot. Chuck lowered the shield on Dr. Weir's orders and immediately had to duck as a stray beam shot just past his ear.  The team leader screamed at him to raise the shield as more beams slammed into walls and Chuck quickly popped back up to slap the right key. His heart still thudding quickly in his chest, Chuck called the med team in as two of the marines gently lowered Lt. Hernandez to the floor. She was a bloody mess and motionless and the med team went into a frenzy over her as soon as they hit the room.  Chuck checked her name off the list with a shaky hand. Two more left to be found.

 

The next evening brought news that Lt. Hernandez would live although her career as a soldier was over and there was a slight, uneasy air of relief in the gate room as Chuck settled in for his shift. The night passed with its usual check-ins from the remaining rescue teams. Still nothing. Chuck noted Dr. Weir's shoulders drooping more as each hour passed with no good news as she sat in her office.  At around 3am he got up from his station and drapped his jacket over her shoulders as she slept.  At 6:30 she returned it to him wordlessly. He handed the list over unchanged to  the next shift's gate tech. Chuck asked Dr. Weir to join him for breakfast and they both stared wordlessly into their coffee mugs til their coffee went cold.

 

Chuck spend the next three evenings uneventfully, the list keeping him cold company through the night. Dr. Beckett had started coming to the gateroom at midnight and coralling Dr. Weir off to her quarters.  Dr. Weir always came back by 5 am. The rescue teams continued to make their check ins. Nothing yet.

 

There was a small bit of lightness in the air that evening and Chuck smiled briefly as he sat in his chair and looked over the list.  Sgt. Colquitt had been found and brought in during the day shift. He'd be in the infirmary for quite a while, but was expected to recover fully. He'd heard about it earlier, but seeing the name struck off the list as accounted made it official to Chuck now. Only one left yet to be accounted for. Chuck nodded to Dr. Beckett as he walked past him to Dr. Weir's office. He looked tired to the bone. Check-ins came in on time all night. Nothing found yet.

 

Chuck sits down in his chair for the evening and looks at the list. Still one name left. His stomach churns and he eats a mint to try and calm it down. Chuck settles into the monontony of the evening and tries not to think too hard about Dr. Zelenka's expression at dinner as he sat working on something alone.  Check-ins come through at the appropriate times. Still looking. Still hoping. At midnight Dr. Beckett comes in and collects  Dr. Weir for the evening. A half an hour later, Colonel Sheppard comes hobbling in and plunks down into the chair next to Chuck.  They pass glances, then Chuck goes back to staring at his computer and Sheppard stares at the gate. The night passes in silence between them.

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Date: 2007-01-13 04:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] littlebuttercup.livejournal.com
..... *tear*

Sequel? Maybe?

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Date: 2007-01-16 12:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] littlebuttercup.livejournal.com
Yeah, your story was what influenced my decision to put Chuck into mine :) So thank you!

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Date: 2007-01-13 04:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] moodymuse19.livejournal.com
Oh I quite agree with [livejournal.com profile] x_sleeptodream, sequel?

This was... You know the type of fics you read that makes your heart feel a little bit smaller even though you're telling yourself "Hi, fictional character" but the fic is so good you don't care?
This is it.
I'm not sure that made sense. Hm.
Aw. *tear* *pets John*

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Date: 2007-01-13 05:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] juri-anne.livejournal.com
*sniffle*

Beautiful.

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Date: 2007-01-13 06:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] seratonation.livejournal.com
aw, i'm going ahead and also saying sequel? and if not then I'm just gonna pretend that Rodney walks in all by himself, surprised anyone had any doubts. poor Jon, but more so poor Zelenka. I love how we see everyones reaction from this outside veiw (especially Elizabeths, how a lot like a mom she is, waiting up for her kids, and then having to be forced to sleep by beckett only to come back 5 hours later), and still get Chuck's veiws as well, it was very well done. and ditto for the heart feeling smaller. *sigh*

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Date: 2007-01-13 06:30 am (UTC)
rhianona: (John and rodney friends)
From: [personal profile] rhianona
wow... nice but sequel? I like how you end it...

I actually get a kick out of Chuck the gate tech... I wonder if they will ever give him a name?

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Date: 2007-01-13 06:39 am (UTC)
sholio: sun on winter trees (SGA-rodney brave)
From: [personal profile] sholio
That was so good! Excellent outsider POV on the characters. And ... Rodney's still missing ... *sniffle*

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Date: 2007-01-13 08:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sgatazmy.livejournal.com
nice POV! Now for the part where they bring him back...

Well done. :)

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Date: 2007-01-13 12:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] beam-oflight.livejournal.com
That was really good and sad! I like how it's writen from Chuck's POV but you can also tell how all the other characters are feeling and how it is affecting them.

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Date: 2007-01-13 01:53 pm (UTC)
ext_975: photo of a woof (Paw)
From: [identity profile] springwoof.livejournal.com
::sniffle::

Review

Date: 2007-01-13 11:52 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Excellent for all the reasons already given by other readers.

--Silverthreads

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Date: 2007-01-16 11:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] snazana.livejournal.com
I love reading about ordinary people doing ordinary jobs in extraordinary circumstances. I always wonder what the cooks and janitors and supply people are doing while our heroes are off on other planets having adventures. Poor Chuck the gate guy probably does far too much waiting for people to come home, and I suspect it feels exactly like you've written it.

Thank you for this story, it was quite wonderful.

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Date: 2007-01-18 03:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] saphanibaal.livejournal.com
I like this a lot. "They also serve who stand and wait" indeed. And I don't know what about this reminds me of the works of Frances Hodgson Burnett, but something does.

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Date: 2007-01-21 09:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sdlucly.livejournal.com
I have to say that I clicked on the story for your amazing icon. *pets icon* Did you write an mpreg? Did you? Where is it? Can I read it? Can I totally fangirl your until you write a pregnant!Sheppard story? *giggles madly*

God, poor Chuck. And I love the way you just leave us all hanging there. I mean, after all the times I've done so with my own readers, I so love the fact that now I'm the one left with my heart in my throat. *nods*

Colonel Sheppard was practically beside himself with anger and was riding the search and rescue teams as mercilessly as he could from a bed in the infirmary.

I love this line because I know Sheppard would do so, so totally would. He'd be in bed and demanding answers and for people to GO LOOK FOR RODNEY just because he can't, god he can't and he must hate that. *bounces*

Loved it. And yes, utterly heart your icon. *pets icon*

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Date: 2007-01-23 01:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sdlucly.livejournal.com
Exactly. Sometimes, the story comes to you like that, nothing but angst and leaving you with the feeling that nothing will ever get better again, even if you don't really know, because the story ends before it says so. *nods* Totally.

I wrote a story a while back, in another fandom, where my two in love characters, already together, were in a car. Seth leaves Ryan at a business appointment and when Seth's about three blocks from the building, the building blows up. *giggles* The story ends with Seth just standing before the building, policemen and paramedics making their way in, not knowing if Ryan made it or not. *giggles* I'm evil like that.

And it ended there because my muses knew it should end there, wanting you to feel worried and angsting over that which you can't control. Yep. Loved the ending, all in all, both yours and mine. *bounces*

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Date: 2009-07-26 09:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brasslizard.livejournal.com
...and the the very next morning they get an unscheduled activation and of course it's Rodney. With a ZPM. And coordinates to a fleet of derelict Ancient warships. And a trade agreement with a civilization that will give them coffee in exchange for ballpoint pens. *nod* That's exactly how it happens.

But I love this ending. It's got a great twist of melancholy and stubborn hopefulness to it. Thank you for sharing.

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