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Title: Cradle
Author: Salieri
Challenge: exploring Atlantis
Pairing: Sheppard/McKay
Rating: PG for a little language
Notes: erm, I dunno if this counts as exploring Atlantis, since they are outside of Atlantis, but they can see it from a... different angle, I guess. This story is a little bit inspired by [livejournal.com profile] danvers' coooool AU, "Heat," in which there is parachuting (because, obviously, Danvers knows me and loves me and gives me caaaaaandy), so I hope she doesn't mind. Also, I must thank [livejournal.com profile] tafkarfanfic, who made me a cd called "A Sultry Evening," which was playing in the headphones while I was writing.



He couldn't see Rodney's face, but he could feel it when he gave in, gave it up to the universe as they say. Not the universe. John. The first step is a doozy.

Holy fuck.

Rodney nodded, head cracking against John's chin, and there was no resistance in him anymore, even though the fear was like brass wire threaded through all his veins, and it made him stiff, almost brittle. But he let John fold his arms across his chest, wire-taut and compliant.

Holy fuck.

Then they were falling. Ten meters per second per second falling. The air was ripping past them, and in his ear Rodney's voice was speed-torn, stretched to a thin, whipping flag, and John could feel Rodney's heart slamming against him like a fist against a locked door and John couldn't feel his own heart at all. And there was sea-sun-sea-sun-sea-sun, blue chasing white chasing blue and the colours were roaring in his wide open eyes, streaked with spinning, Atlantis pulsing at the edge of things, silver needles pinning the ocean as it tried to sheer away from the sky.

And then he snapped his arms out. The world stopped tumbling and he was looking down past Rodney's head at the ocean, turbulent, and everything inside them was floating, inertia, out-of-sync, resisting with the memory of when they weren't falling, so that for a crazy second it felt like they were falling up. When there was no tension at all anymore on the hooks of the harness, Rodney's body finding its own way to fall, John put his mouth against Rodney's ear and shouted, "Now!" and Rodney's fingers unwound from the straps on his chest and the speed caught him, and his arms went wide and John found his hands and held them tight and counted Rodney's heartbeats pounding inside John's own chest and although the ocean rushed up at them it looked like it wasn't; it was a blanket of crinkled silk and they seemed to hang there above it, windhovers, their jumpsuits rattling against their legs, their mouths full of sound. The world pulled them down and the air pushed against them, a slippery, fruitless grip, and the sky was a scouring, wordless howl.

Thirty seconds. Folding Rodney's arms across his chest, John held them there for a moment, even after Rodney's fingers closed again on the harness straps, and there was only falling that felt like flying, skin bare against wind, and if the planet would only just lean out of the way, they could fall forever, but the silk of the ocean was snagged and unraveling now, whitecapped and crumpled around Atlantis. It was time to

"Stop!" John shouted.

And they did. Not all at once, but with a slowing, stretching loss of momentum, like the air was elastic, space giving way, folding around them, their speed deflected outward in an iridescent rippling that bent the horizon for a moment into a bow. First he felt compressed, squeezed inside two cupped hands--ocean and sky--and then he was expanding from the centre, a bubble filling with breath. Rodney's hands loosened on the straps for a second, floating free until John covered them with his and folded them around the grips again. Around them, the field converted motion to heat, cast it away from them so they were the dark centre of a blooming flower of light. The roaring of air became a sigh.

Tucking his knees, and folding Rodney up, too, he somersaulted them onto their backs so that they could see the last shimmer of their falling as it split the sun into three liquid beads of white and passed on, dissipating into the blue. Then the light was gone and beads melted together again and the world snapped flat again, and John and Rodney drifted down down down and settled just above the chop, swaying like apples in an apron.

Suddenly, Rodney was heavy again, his heart back where it belonged. John's own heart was stumbling, trying to keep pace with his, but slowing, slowing as the gravity field cradled them at the bottom of the well, 8000 feet of speed above them and the jumper a dash like an an iron filing spiraling down toward them.

Rodney lay against him, his head in the crook of his shoulder. His weight kept John from falling into the sky, and it wasn't such a bad thing to lie there in an invisible hammock with his arms still around him, holding Rodney together while the adrenaline and fear shuddered through him and dissolved into the air, gentled away by the motion of the field and the steadiness of John's breathing.

After a little while, when the jumper was still more of a shape than a ship, Rodney stiffly uncurled his fingers from their deathgrip on the harness straps and tapped his helmet headset off. Then he rolled his head a little so his mouth was against John's jaw and said, "The things I do for love."

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Date: 2005-05-21 03:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] umbo.livejournal.com
Wow, this was great.

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Date: 2005-05-21 03:47 pm (UTC)
zoerayne: (john & rodney)
From: [personal profile] zoerayne
Oh, you so totally nailed the sensations of freefall. This was fabulous and amazing, and the last line is just perfect. Thanks!

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Date: 2005-05-21 09:18 pm (UTC)
zoerayne: (john & rodney)
From: [personal profile] zoerayne
You've done it?

Two decades ago, but yeah. I still remember parts of it vividly.

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Date: 2005-05-23 03:13 am (UTC)
fenris_wolf0: So innocent it hurts! (Default)
From: [personal profile] fenris_wolf0
Heh. Skydiving used to be/is my true passion and it is so very neat to see your story being based on it! And your description is gripping and gives an immediate feeling which is the way it really feels like.

Freefall: there's nothing like it on Earth! (easy joke which I think never gets old...) Which I guess is appropriate since they are not on Earth.

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Date: 2005-05-27 02:38 am (UTC)
fenris_wolf0: So innocent it hurts! (Default)
From: [personal profile] fenris_wolf0
It is the greatest feeling. And if a tandem jump has a lot of advantages -no responsability at all- a static line jump has its own charms, including being a lot cheaper because you jump by yourself and your parachute opens immediately.

Granted, you end up having to train for most of a day and have to negotiate your own landing but nowadays, square chutes allow for very soft landings -whereas round chutes meant a very hard landing- and after a few static line jumps you can graduate to real freefall, and that is absolutely the best, most wonderful experience! :)

Rush

Date: 2005-05-21 05:00 pm (UTC)
joatamon: (Default)
From: [personal profile] joatamon
God, this is beautifully described and intimate and sensual and I've never wanted to go skydiving more in my *life*. Thank you.

Re: Rush

Date: 2005-05-22 11:32 am (UTC)
joatamon: (Default)
From: [personal profile] joatamon
Also be prepared to fall madly in love with your instructor, because something about having your life literally in his hands makes him incredibly attractive. *g*

Hee! I definitely get that feeling from your story:)

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Date: 2005-05-21 05:12 pm (UTC)
cofax7: climbing on an abbey wall  (Default)
From: [personal profile] cofax7
Wow.

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Date: 2005-05-21 05:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenlev.livejournal.com
this is exquisite.

and this is perfect: "even though the fear was like brass wire threaded through all his veins, and it made him stiff, almost brittle."

what a gorgeous image: "John could feel Rodney's heart slamming against him like a fist against a locked door and John couldn't feel his own heart at all."

this whole story has such luscious tone and cadence, and the experience of their descent is remarkable. oh, the ocean as a "blanket of crinkled silk". *yes*

wow. just. plain. wow. and hee! rodney's comment at the end is *so* him.

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Date: 2005-05-22 05:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenlev.livejournal.com
bwahaha! red shirts indeed. and rodney would not hesitate to point that out to john.

and you're right about "freefalling in tandem". meep.

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Date: 2005-05-21 06:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ex-danvers514.livejournal.com
*meep*

because, obviously, Danvers knows me and loves me and gives me caaaaaandy

Aaaaaaaaall for you ;-)

I've wanted to parachute since I was in school, but somewhere along the line, I became *very* scared and utterly cowardly. This made me just that little bit more TERRIFIED!! ;-)

It also made me realise that if Shep wanted to strap himself to me and take me for a jump, I'd go *bg*

Cool fic ;-)

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Date: 2005-05-21 07:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teand.livejournal.com
When I entered the military, one of the 'careers' they offered me was parachute packer. The mere thought that they'd let someone like me pack parachutes has forever turned me off the idea of jumping out of a plane.

You may have just turned it back on.

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Date: 2005-05-21 08:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wildmachinery.livejournal.com
Oh, that was beautiful.

Suddenly, Rodney was heavy again, his heart back where it belonged. John's own heart was stumbling, trying to keep pace with his, but slowing, slowing

I love that.

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Date: 2005-05-21 08:06 pm (UTC)
ext_1175: (M/S 1)
From: [identity profile] lamardeuse.livejournal.com
Wow. I'm really, really enjoying the caliber of writing in this fandom, and I've barely even started. :) Wonderful.

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Date: 2005-05-21 10:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] misspamela.livejournal.com
Wow. This is fantastic. I really don't have adequate words for feedback.

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Date: 2005-05-21 10:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
Oh, my god, that was beautiful. I was thinking, "That's wildly original" and at the same time I was thinking, "The author has clearly actually done that, to be able to describe it so precisely."

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Date: 2005-05-22 12:52 am (UTC)
ext_2353: amanda tapping, chris judge, end of an era (sga sheppard/mckay)
From: [identity profile] scrollgirl.livejournal.com
Incredible. So wild and blue and sensational! Wow, you make me almost want to go skydiving myself, and I'm deathly afraid of heights!

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Date: 2005-06-05 04:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] afearfulthing.livejournal.com
yes, the 'not high' effect is very strange. I haven't skydived (though you have reinforced my longing to try it), but I've gone para-sailing, which gives you the same strange disassociation from the landscape. You fall closer and closer to it and it starts looking more real - loved that: they could fall forever, but the silk of the ocean was snagged and unraveling now, whitecapped and crumpled around Atlantis - but somehow you never lose that strange conviction that it's actually some kind of model. Right up until you touch down, and all of a sudden you're back in the real world.

I've always had flying dreams, and always knew they weren't real while I was having them, because I'm convinced they must feel different. The dreams always feel like scuba diving with out all the stuff around you - one of the reasons I both love and hate scuba. My theory is that our sense of reality/unreality comes from the tactile/weight sensations - all we can feel is the parachute holding us up. This is why I want to skydive, and I really really want to hangglide.

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Date: 2005-05-22 02:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elvinborn.livejournal.com
oh wow.
thank you

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Date: 2005-05-22 02:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ellex42.livejournal.com
Beautifully described. You almost make me want to try skydiving.

Almost...

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Date: 2005-05-22 04:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tafkarfanfic.livejournal.com
Yay! Beautiful description. I'm glad the music inspired you.

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Date: 2005-05-23 01:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tafkarfanfic.livejournal.com
Ah, yes, Haujobb's "Penetration". It's a great mood-song. (The rest of the album is kind of crap, IMHO, a little redundant.) I can see where it would feel like freefall. It's a good sex song, but I think it's a good song for action scenes. *sticks song in "Action Mix" playlist*

And it makes me inordinately chuffed that you like my mixes enough to still be listening to them. Love knowing what pushes your buttons - it means if I make another mix, I can focus on that stuff in particular. I can't seem to nail down what you'll like, yet - I guessed "Such Good Songs" would be one you'd like, but some of the others have been a surprise.

Eeeeeee! You sent me something! I'm so excited. And Boy is home a lot this week, so he will be able to meet the postman. Who, I'm sure, would always ring twice, but we don't have a doorbell.

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Date: 2005-05-22 06:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] barkeep.livejournal.com
Beautiful imagery - very nice!

wow

Date: 2005-05-22 08:19 pm (UTC)
ext_975: photo of a woof (Default)
From: [identity profile] springwoof.livejournal.com
I loved your imagery:
the ocean as a blanket of crinkled silk
and Atlantis silver needles pinning the ocean as it tried to sheer away from the sky.
and the force field catching them: swaying like apples in an apron

(I'll have to stop, or will end up quoting the whole thing.)

fabulous!
wags, springwoof

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Date: 2005-05-24 05:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] raucousraven.livejournal.com
Ooh. My head 'sploded. Colour! Spinning! 9.8 m/s^2 straight down, straight down town!

But my heart? Very, very happy.

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Date: 2005-05-26 09:01 pm (UTC)
tinny: Something Else holding up its colorful drawing - "be different" (sga_atlantis)
From: [personal profile] tinny
OMG, this is incredible. I read it practically in slow motion, it was so dense, so packed with emotion. It's definitely something to be read at night, when my brain is already half-gone and open to these things. It was an almost mind-expanding experience.

I do sound like I am on drugs now, don't I? I swear, it's nothing but the adrenaline from reading about free fall. I am very much exhilarated now by everything they felt. The descriptions were so unusual, the pulsing at the edge of things, silver needles pinning the ocean as it tried to sheer away from the sky and space giving way, folding around them, *so* great. And just to imagine being held by Sheppard all the way through it, wow.

Thank you!

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Date: 2006-01-11 01:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poisonshock.livejournal.com
wow, love ending, the last line, esp

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